What do yall think of my poem ?

[Blackpillirony]

It’s a poem that can both be applied to some type of romantic interest and a cigarette/nicotine addiction. Had this idea when I was smoking a cig


"I went to you for warmth but you left me colder
You were hanging on my lips
I was hanging on to you
Your white neck, the remedy to my longing
Well, not for long
Once you're gone you're back there
My fogged mind draws you clearer"

 

[Blackpillirony]

@Nbernical @dipenhydramine

 

[America]

It's cool

 

[dipenhydramine]

pretty nice

 

[Molotongo]

Pretty good

 

[BriannaPilled]

type o negative clone ahhhh poem (not objectively a bad thing, good work)

 

[MingyuePalaceRuinedMyLife]

It’s a poem that can both be applied to some type of romantic interest and a cigarette/nicotine addiction. Had this idea when I was smoking a cig



Your white neck,

Did you HAVE to include that you like snowbunnies

 

[Blackpillirony]

Did you HAVE to include that you like snowbunnies

I thought about the cig first for that line

 

[choppedmidtierbecky]

It’s a poem that can both be applied to some type of romantic interest and a cigarette/nicotine addiction. Had this idea when I was smoking a cig


"I went to you for warmth but you left me colder
You were hanging on my lips
I was hanging on to you
Your white neck, the remedy to my longing
Well, not for long
Once you're gone you're back there
My fogged mind draws you clearer"

i fw it

 

[Blackpillirony]

type o negative clone ahhhh poem (not objectively a bad thing, good work)

I like type o negative but I haven't listened to them in a while