What do yall think of my poem ?

[Blackpillirony]

It’s a poem that can both be applied to some type of romantic interest and a cigarette/nicotine addiction. Had this idea when I was smoking a cig


"I went to you for warmth but you left me colder
You were hanging on my lips
I was hanging on to you
Your white neck, the remedy to my longing
Well, not for long
Once you're gone you're back there
My fogged mind draws you clearer"

 

[Blackpillirony]

@Nbernical @dipenhydramine

 

[America]

It's cool

 

[dipenhydramine]

pretty nice

 

[Molotongo]

Pretty good

 

[BriannaPilled]

type o negative clone ahhhh poem (not objectively a bad thing, good work)

 

[MingYue]

It’s a poem that can both be applied to some type of romantic interest and a cigarette/nicotine addiction. Had this idea when I was smoking a cig



Your white neck,

Did you HAVE to include that you like snowbunnies

 

[Blackpillirony]

Did you HAVE to include that you like snowbunnies

I thought about the cig first for that line

 

[choppedmidtierbecky]

It’s a poem that can both be applied to some type of romantic interest and a cigarette/nicotine addiction. Had this idea when I was smoking a cig


"I went to you for warmth but you left me colder
You were hanging on my lips
I was hanging on to you
Your white neck, the remedy to my longing
Well, not for long
Once you're gone you're back there
My fogged mind draws you clearer"

i fw it

 

[Blackpillirony]

type o negative clone ahhhh poem (not objectively a bad thing, good work)

I like type o negative but I haven't listened to them in a while

 

[Blackpillirony]

It’s a poem that can both be applied to some type of romantic interest and a cigarette/nicotine addiction. Had this idea when I was smoking a cig


"I went to you for warmth but you left me colder
You were hanging on my lips
I was hanging on to you
Your white neck, the remedy to my longing
Well, not for long
Once you're gone you're back there
My fogged mind draws you clearer"

Bump newgens

 

[Blackpillirony]

Bump

 

[submissivechud]

It’s a poem that can both be applied to some type of romantic interest and a cigarette/nicotine addiction. Had this idea when I was smoking a cig


"I went to you for warmth but you left me colder
You were hanging on my lips
I was hanging on to you
Your white neck, the remedy to my longing
Well, not for long
Once you're gone you're back there
My fogged mind draws you clearer"

I enjoyed it
It didn't have a nice rhyme
but It was quite beautiful