rate my love poem part 2

[moonlight1]

My darling, you are the torment of my heart; I feel you so much and desire you so deeply that you torment me, yet I still desire even more of this sweet torture.

I will inevitably dream of you, for I am such a dreamer, and now you live as the object of my reveries. I could dream of you for hours, days, months, and what pleasure it would be to dream of you for the rest of my life.

Awake in the middle of the night, all I can hear is my heart incessantly calling your name, so I try to escape it with music, but still, your voice is the most beautiful song I could hear.

So, I pray to God that perhaps He, seeing the magnitude of my love, will give me to you as your vassal, and you, forever, as my beloved.

 

[Ghoultune]

I would say CHATGPT and Block. That's just me, so maybe it's good

 

[moonlight1]

My darling, you are the torment of my heart; I feel you so much and desire you so deeply that you torment me, yet I still desire even more of this sweet torture.

I will inevitably dream of you, for I am such a dreamer, and now you live as the object of my reveries. I could dream of you for hours, days, months, and what pleasure it would be to dream of you for the rest of my life.

Awake in the middle of the night, all I can hear is my heart incessantly calling your name, so I try to escape it with music, but still, your voice is the most beautiful song I could hear.

So, I pray to God that perhaps He, seeing the magnitude of my love, will give me to you as your vassal, and you, forever, as my beloved.

I’m a begginer in writing, I really need opinions please

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[Ghoultune]

I’m a begginer in writing, I really need opinions please

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Don't do that

 

[Rololongs]

My darling, you are the torment of my heart; I feel you so much and desire you so deeply that you torment me, yet I still desire even more of this sweet torture.

I will inevitably dream of you, for I am such a dreamer, and now you live as the object of my reveries. I could dream of you for hours, days, months, and what pleasure it would be to dream of you for the rest of my life.

Awake in the middle of the night, all I can hear is my heart incessantly calling your name, so I try to escape it with music, but still, your voice is the most beautiful song I could hear.

So, I pray to God that perhaps He, seeing the magnitude of my love, will give me to you as your vassal, and you, forever, as my beloved.

you don't need to do all of that

 

[Galvatron]

I’m a begginer in writing, I really need opinions please

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Gay. Don’t @ me again n***a

 

[Deleted Member]

hello
sounds nice

 

[moonlight1]

I would say CHATGPT and Block. That's just me, so maybe it's good

it’s not being sent, i used the wrong word it’s not s text, it’s more of a poem. This is not being sent

 

[Deleted Member 96020]

Gay. Don’t @ me again n***a

@moonlight1 is not gay

 

[Ghoultune]

it’s not being sent, i used the wrong word it’s not s text, it’s more of a poem. This is not being sent

OHHHH. Ok.

 

[foidslayer]

I’m a begginer in writing, I really need opinions please

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i hope you get groomed for listing me in a masstag other than that overall 8-8.5/10 id say too much repitition of ideas and some awkward phrases

 

[moonlight1]

i hope you get groomed for listing me in a masstag other than that overall 8-8.5/10 id say too much repitition of ideas and some awkward phrases

i’m sorry for tagging i didn’t knew people disliked being tagged that much

 

[foidslayer]

i’m sorry for tagging i didn’t knew people disliked being tagged that much

i like being tagged when its a lone tag it makes me feel special

 

[Galvatron]

i hope you get groomed for listing me in a masstag other than that overall 8-8.5/10 id say too much repitition of ideas and some awkward phrases

What he said

 

[Deleted member 77539]

Le/10

 

[Almighty Sigma Wolf]

My darling, you are the torment of my heart; I feel you so much and desire you so deeply that you torment me, yet I still desire even more of this sweet torture.

I will inevitably dream of you, for I am such a dreamer, and now you live as the object of my reveries. I could dream of you for hours, days, months, and what pleasure it would be to dream of you for the rest of my life.

Awake in the middle of the night, all I can hear is my heart incessantly calling your name, so I try to escape it with music, but still, your voice is the most beautiful song I could hear.

So, I pray to God that perhaps He, seeing the magnitude of my love, will give me to you as your vassal, and you, forever, as my beloved.

Boiiiii Natsuki had better poems than whatever this is but you'll improve one day moonlight

 

[moonlight1]

Boiiiii Natsuki had better poems than whatever this is but you'll improve one day moonlight

natsuki is my girl
well, thanks for being honest tho. i think my other one was better

 

[Deleted Member 78932]

My darling, you are the torment of my heart; I feel you so much and desire you so deeply that you torment me, yet I still desire even more of this sweet torture.

I will inevitably dream of you, for I am such a dreamer, and now you live as the object of my reveries. I could dream of you for hours, days, months, and what pleasure it would be to dream of you for the rest of my life.

Awake in the middle of the night, all I can hear is my heart incessantly calling your name, so I try to escape it with music, but still, your voice is the most beautiful song I could hear.

So, I pray to God that perhaps He, seeing the magnitude of my love, will give me to you as your vassal, and you, forever, as my beloved.

That's not even a poem

 

[Mia]

My darling, you are the torment of my heart; I feel you so much and desire you so deeply that you torment me, yet I still desire even more of this sweet torture.

I will inevitably dream of you, for I am such a dreamer, and now you live as the object of my reveries. I could dream of you for hours, days, months, and what pleasure it would be to dream of you for the rest of my life.

Awake in the middle of the night, all I can hear is my heart incessantly calling your name, so I try to escape it with music, but still, your voice is the most beautiful song I could hear.

So, I pray to God that perhaps He, seeing the magnitude of my love, will give me to you as your vassal, and you, forever, as my beloved.

nice poem

 

[Garce]

My darling, you are the torment of my heart; I feel you so much and desire you so deeply that you torment me, yet I still desire even more of this sweet torture.

I will inevitably dream of you, for I am such a dreamer, and now you live as the object of my reveries. I could dream of you for hours, days, months, and what pleasure it would be to dream of you for the rest of my life.

Awake in the middle of the night, all I can hear is my heart incessantly calling your name, so I try to escape it with music, but still, your voice is the most beautiful song I could hear.

So, I pray to God that perhaps He, seeing the magnitude of my love, will give me to you as your vassal, and you, forever, as my beloved.

It’s Nice But you do have some improvement ahead of you , if you want I’ll give you some tips - I like to write too

 

[moonlight1]

It’s Nice But you do have some improvement ahead of you , if you want I’ll give you some tips - I like to write too

yes please

 

[Perceval]

Bad tempo needs structure its all over the place. Needs some sort of cadence

 

[Garce]

yes please

Try rhyming more , it’s definitely beginner friendly.
Also using the same word over again is a bit suffocating if not done well do I wouldn’t recommend.
Higher language is good too , I can show you my writing too if you’re interested btw

 

[Deleted Member 74605]

Don't do that

The dislikes Im caging

 

[moonlight1]

Try rhyming more , it’s definitely beginner friendly.
Also using the same word over again is a bit suffocating if not done well do I wouldn’t recommend.
Higher language is good too , I can show you my writing too if you’re interested btw

yea i wanna see it

 

[Garce]

yea i wanna see it

I’ll
Pm you

 

[Bloxy]

I’m a begginer in writing, I really need opinions please

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Never tag me again f****t